Zal Deathomen

I'm going to start off by saying that you're story has the potential to be awsome! but, there are many problems that I saw while reading it. I'm sorry, but ...

It is good. You are very descriptive, and I like that. You convey the details very well, and you make it very clear what is happening. Yet, as with every ...

Hi there! I'm Zal, I like long walks on the beaches, romantic evenings with my special lady, and girls... Ahh, girls. (Sorry ladies, I'm taken. *Wink*) Now back to a ...